During the field trip, I almost wasn’t sad because I had lots of fun with all friends and teachers. Everything went awesome and especially, the best moment left in my head and now still stay in my mind was when our group visited Ben Cu waterfall. There, shining sunlight lay everywhere and the river was splendor with volcano rocks above and below the surface. The waterfall ran from the upstream and went through the forest below. I stood up high at the upstream and saw towards the river where it ran to. Then, I mischievously jumped to the rocks in the edge of the river. The water was cool even under the hot sunshine, it made us comfortable when we surrounded, after go sightseeing for one and a half hour. After all, the instructor told us to come back to Nation Park
I rate myself 10/12. For my beginning, I quite started well to catch attention. Especially, I chose the different words from repeating but still suitable. I used some daily and common words to describe but it wasn't really bad at all and I make sure that everyone can understand what I mean. Not many vital grammar mistakes stay in and it's quite ready to publish. However, I use the Check Spelling so my spelling is surely correct. One of the problem I'm wondering is that my verb tense correct or not. In conclusion, I think 10/12 suit most for me.
Trả lờiXóaYou described the moment well. You have some grammar and spelling mistakes. Personally I think you have some word choice problems, but yeah 10/12 fits.
Trả lờiXóaIn addition, personally I think you using too many descriptive words in a sentence doesn't make the sentence sounds good. Indeed, you had a very descriptive sentence next to a wordy, runny sentence with dead words. It is good to have descriptive words, but better if you share them equally to each sentence. Read your paragraph aloud to make sure that you don't have long sentences that you can always seperate to make it clearer.
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